{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17861707","dateCreated":"1260222261","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cryssy1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cryssy1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17861707"},"dateDigested":1532390398,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Conventions","description":"Remembering our Flag conatined a lot of spelling mistakes and the author could have structured the essay betterand removed a lot of the question. Aunt Leisa contained many spelling errors, almost every other word, even common words. What Are the Qualities of a Good Teacher was the best written of the three essays. The spelling is correct, the paragraphing is organized correctly and there is a thorough understanding for the reader.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17849527","dateCreated":"1260209632","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cryssy1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cryssy1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17849527"},"dateDigested":1532390398,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Fluency","description":"Bud was poorly written, the essay conatained too many periods which does not allow the reader to flow through the passage. The sentences are choppy and incomplete and need a great deal of work. Remembering Our Flag contains a lot of commas and pauses; the sentences get the idea across about purpose of the essay. All About Rabbits does not invite expressive oral reading. The essay has no "sentence sence" presence, many of the sentences do not make sense and therefore makes it more difficult for the reader to display any typr of fluency or smoothness while reading.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17848603","dateCreated":"1260208295","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cryssy1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cryssy1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17848603"},"dateDigested":1532390398,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Choice","description":"Mother is Nice is written by a fifth grader and had limited vocabulary, the writer repeates the word nice numerous times. The writer could have chosen to write the piece differnetly by using a variety of adjectives to describe the ways in which their mother is nice. My Most Rewarding Moment was not organized correctly, there was no form. The writer could have chosen to write a narrative instead of using mainly quotes of what everyone said throughout his trip. A&W was givena score of 5 because the author used a variety of words to describe their food and the way they felt upon receiving and tasting it. The language used was natural and effective, and also appropriate for the audience.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17848047","dateCreated":"1260207709","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cryssy1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cryssy1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17848047"},"dateDigested":1532390398,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Voice","description":"A Day as a Raindrop makes the reader feel like they are a part of the story, the writer enagages the audience in the essay. The score of 5 was well deserved for this piece of writing. One Day I Was Riding was not something that one would expect a fifth grader to write. athe writer's style is mismatch from the reader and because the essay is so short it does not go beyong introducing the title. I think the rough draft Frogs deserved a better score than a 1 because it was clear enough for the reader to understand. Because it was a rough draft I think a score of 2 or 3 would have been fair.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17857367","body":"Well, there were 4 of us only trying to come up with a consensus for VOICE and we gave FROGS a 1 only because the requirements for VOICE scoring was that the writer speak directly to the reader in a way that is compelling or engaging, and in this case, the paper does not do that- it is nothing but facts and statistics, the writer does not speak to the reader in a compelling way nor does it have any interaction with the reader at all. If you would have responded a lot sooner than the day you did maybe you would have had some input in the way you feel about the score you made. That is what we chose.","dateCreated":"1260217991","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fallbaby1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fallbaby1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17846381","dateCreated":"1260205555","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cryssy1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cryssy1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17846381"},"dateDigested":1532390399,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Organization","description":"To be a good Teacher was a very poorly written essay, it definitely deserved a score of 1. The writing lacks a clear sense of direction and makes it difficult for the reader to fully understand. What are teh Qualities of a Good Teacher was very well written. The organization shows the ideas and themes of the article and flows smoothly. A Good Teacher was organized enough for the reader to understand what the writer is trying to say. the structure is strong enough to move the reader through the text without too much confusion.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17845551","dateCreated":"1260204453","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"cryssy1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cryssy1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17845551"},"dateDigested":1532390399,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Ideas","description":"I agree with the scores that were given to the three passages Cat\/Dog, Earth and Zeena. The essay Cat\/Dog was very poorly written and lacked direction. It also did not contain complete sentences and was very confusing. The essay Earth was somewhat poorly written as well but the idea of the essay is pretty clear. Zeena was the best essay written of the three, the writer stays on the topic and the reader is able to understand what the main idea and what is going on.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17829471","dateCreated":"1260164094","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fallbaby1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fallbaby1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17829471"},"dateDigested":1532390399,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"FINAL CONSENSUS-CONVENTIONS","description":"Hi everyone,
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\nHere are the final consensus scores for Conventions:
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\nREMEMBERING OUR FLAG 3
\n(It was a unanimous score of 3 for everyone who posted a score.
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\nAUNT LEISA 1
\n(Another unanimous score of 1 for everyone who posted a score.
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\nWHAT ARE THE QUALITIES OF A GOOD TEACHER 5
\n(3 out of 4 people agreed on 5)
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\nIsabel","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17856123","body":"Thanks for posting them Isabel.
\nGreat job.
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\nSamar","dateCreated":"1260216457","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"samarmatar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/samarmatar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17829401","dateCreated":"1260163694","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fallbaby1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fallbaby1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17829401"},"dateDigested":1532390399,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"FINAL CONSENSUS-SENTENCE FLUENCY","description":"Hi everyone,
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\nWell, here are the final consensus scores for the stories scored for sentence fluency- sorry for whoever has not posted their scores yet, this had to get done!
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\nBUD 1
\n(3 out of 4 people agreed on a score of 1
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\nREMEMBERING OUR FLAG 3
\n(2 out of 4 people agreed on a score of 3
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\nALL ABOUT RABBITS 1
\n(2 people scored a 1, and the other 2 scored a 3) I scored a 3, but after reading the story again, I agree with Samar and Rae415 that it should be a 1
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\nI WILL POST THESE ON THE HOME PAGE- Isabel","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17827739","dateCreated":"1260158416","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"samarmatar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/samarmatar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17827739"},"dateDigested":1532390399,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Presentation Consensus","description":"Here is what our concensus will read.
\nWe agreed that Presentation in our future classrooms would be very important. We believe that it would necessary to teach our students that appropriate way to present papers. Papers that are handwritten need to have a clear format with enough white space and proper letter formation. Papers that are word processed need to have a clear font that is consistent throughout the writing.
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\nAs for the Rubrics, I like the four point rubric because it gives the teacher a little bit more detail than the 3 point rubric yet not as much as the 6 point rubric. I think the six point rubric is great for students in the upper grades (7-12) while the 3 point rubric is good for lower level grades.
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\nThe examples of the papers were very helpful.
\nI think the score of 1 for paper #1 was appropriate.
\nPaper #2\u2019s score of 2 would also be appropriate because, as a teacher, I would not want to spend that much time trying to decode what is written.
\nPaper #3 I believe was easy to read and did not have any distracting details that made it hard to read. It\u2019s score of 4 is also appropriate.
\nPaper # 4 \u2018s score of 3. The font is clear and readable however, the spacing between the paragraphs is distracting.
\nPaper #5\u2019s score of 4 is what I would also agree with. I do think the title is a little large yet everything else is pleasing to the eye and makes for easy reading.
\nPaper #6\u2019s score of 5 is well deserved. I agree that this paper presents flawlessly. The font is consistent with even margins all the way around the paper.
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\nSamar","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17826349","dateCreated":"1260155678","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"samarmatar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/samarmatar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17826349"},"dateDigested":1532390399,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Final Consensus for Word Choice","description":"Hi everyone,
\nOkay, I decided to finish one more and then I am done it is up to Leana to do one or two more if no one else logs on, sorry Leana you win by default.
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\nMother is Nice: 1. We all agreed that this was a poorly written paper and lacked a variety of word choices.
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\nMy Most Rewarding Moment:1
\nwe were split on this one. Two of us decided on a score of 1 and two decided on a score of 3.
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\nAfter I reread the passage, I think a score of 1 would work for many reasons. First, the words did distract from the reading and leave me confused. Second, there were several words that were used incorrectly(replied, indicated, disputed) others just do not make sense (thesaurua overload). I am going to give it a 1. Sorry if anyone disagrees.
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\nA&W: 5. This was an easy one to score. We all agreed that it was good writing with great word choice that made sense. The author used a variety of words that were natural, lively, and add energy to the writing.
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\nSamar","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}