{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17814437","dateCreated":"1260137832","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17814437"},"dateDigested":1532390381,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Posting","description":"I hope you guys don't mind, but I posted the points\/scores on the page. I went through each response and whichever one had the majority of us think that, was what I put.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17861045","body":"Thank you so so much for doing that! i really appreciate it!","dateCreated":"1260221664","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17757783","dateCreated":"1259945780","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17757783"},"dateDigested":1532390381,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Rubrics","description":"Four-point Scoring Rubric: I feel like it is the perfect balance of categories. The categories can be at 4 levels, experimenting, developing, effective, and strong. These levels do not seem to overlap and break down the categories in a very effective way.
\nFive-point Scoring Rubric: This rubric is still very effective, with the five different levels of experimenting, emerging, developing, effective, and strong, The categories are still pretty separate and do not overlap, but I feel that one level is really not necessary. Emerging and developing to me, sort of mean the same thing. As a teacher, it would be hard to differentiate between the two.
\nSix-point Scoring Rubric: I just feel that the six-point scoring rubric has too many levels to grade off of. There is experimenting, emerging, developing, effective, strong, and exceptional. The levels inevitably will overlap and run together. I feel as if some of the levels are so similar too, that it would be a challenge to score a student\u2019s work.
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\nPreference: My preference would be the 4-point scale because I feel like when you get to the more elaborate rubrics, the difference between a 4 score and a 5 score is not that different. I feel like the scores would start to run together. With a 4-point scale, the 4 points of 1: Experimenting, 2: Developing, 3: Effective, and 4: Strong, break down the categories in more than enough levels.
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\nStrengths and
\nWeaknesses of the 6 + 1 Traits: I feel like there are many strengths and weaknesses to the 6 + 1Traits system. Some strengths that I see are the fact that the rubrics break down each piece of writing in categories like ideas, organization, voice, word choice, sentence fluency, conventions, and presentation. There is an explanation for what is expected and no surprises. The expectation is written right there. The categories are then divided into levels, which break down a piece of work even further. Each category is a very important part of the writing process and this system reinforces that fact. It reveals that it is not just about the information, but also the presentation, the choices of words, and how it is organized. A weakness I do see is that for some rubrics there are too many levels to score a student on. I definitely think, however, that the 6 + 1 Traits is a great tool for scoring students\u2019 work.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17806741","body":"Scoring Rubrics:
\nFour-point Scoring Rubric: I feel that this rubric is right in the middle of the other two containing the perfect balance of categories. The categories can be at 4 levels, experimenting, developing, effective, and strong; they do not seem to overlap.
\nFive-point Scoring Rubric: I feel that rubric is also very effective containing the five different levels of experimenting, emerging, developing, effective, and strong. Similar to the 4-point rubric, they are still separate and do not overlap; however, I feel that emerging and developing are the same\u2014I agree with Megan completely.
\nSix-point Scoring Rubric: This rubric is too much! It is hard to grade with and I can imagine the students feeling overwhelmed if I presented this to them. This rubric includes experimenting, emerging, developing, effective, strong, and exceptional. The levels will overlap.
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\nPreference: I would prefer to use the 4-point scale. The 4 points, 1: Experimenting, 2: Developing, 3: Effective, and 4: Strong, break down the categories in enough levels and it is easy to follow and use for grading. My students will not feel as overwhelmed.
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\nStrengths and Weaknesses: I feel the 6+1 is a great scoring tool in evaluating students work. Some strengths include that the rubrics break down each piece of writing in categories: ideas, organization, voice, word choice, sentence fluency, conventions, and presentation. There is an explanation for what is expected making it easier to complete. The categories are then divided into levels, which break down a piece of work even further. Each category is a very important part of the writing process and this system reinforces that fact revealing that it is not just about the information in a given paper, but also the presentation, the choices of words, and how it is organized are equally important. A weakness in the rubrics, I feel, are that they contain several levels to score from.","dateCreated":"1260116466","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17757725","dateCreated":"1259945734","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17757725"},"dateDigested":1532390382,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Presentation","description":"Paper #1: I completely agree that the paper deserves a one because there are so many scribbles and scratch outs, which make it hard to read. The white spaces on the page are random and distracting.
\nPaper #2: If a reader cannot actually read the paper, it is a very negative thing. The student\u2019s writing is not effective and it causes the readers to concentrate really hard on figuring out what is being said. As they said, \u201cits negatives, however, far outweigh its positives.\u201d
\nPaper#3: I feel like the score of a 4 is a good measure of the paper. It is pleasing to the eye, but the only thing is the handwriting, which \u2018wobbles a bit\u2019. Otherwise, the margins, spacing, and white spaces are well done.
\nPaper#4: The score of a 3, I think, is deserved. The spacing between the paragraphs is very distracting. The font is clear and readable. I do agree that the title is a little large, as well.
\nPaper#5: The paper seems to score well on presentation with a 4. The title is a little large for the page, and the margins on the top and the bottom are not even. The font is readable and spacing is excellent.
\nPaper #6: This is a great example of a 5 in presentation. It is pleasing to the eye and easily readable. He margins, font, spacing, and size work well.
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\nExpectation of Presentation in future classroom: I definitely think expressing the importance of presentation is going to be a main part of my classroom. I feel, that the information on the paper is far more important than how it looks, but if it is unreadable or hard on the eye, the reader will not get the full affect. The presentation of the paper will distract him or her. I will make sure, however, that before I start grading a student on presentation I will explain each component and expectations.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17806601","body":"Expectation of Presentation in my future classroom: Megan, I completely agree with you. I believe presentation is going to be a main part of my classroom as well. The importance of presentation should be presented and explained to students in a thorough manner! Information in a paper is more important than how the paper looks to the reader. The paper MUST be readable, without distractions. I, too, will make sure that I will explain the importance of presentation and what it entails, as well as the expectations of the paper. Good job, Megan =)","dateCreated":"1260115805","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17806971","body":"Paper #1: I would give this paper a 1 also. The blank spots are distracting and due to the extreme amount of scratch outs, it makes the paper hard to read.
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\nPaper #2: I can\u2019t even read this paper. The students writing is not effective; it is unreadable. It causes the readers to concentrate really hard on figuring out what the author put down, let alone the point the student author is trying to get across.
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\nPaper#3: I feel like the score of a 4 is appropriate. It much easier to read\u2014the margins, spacing, and includes a good performance\u2014they are well done.
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\nPaper#4: I agree with the score of a 3. The spacing between the paragraphs is extremely distracting, but the font is clear and readable. I do not mind so much on the size of the title, it captures the readers attention.
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\nPaper#5: The paper deserves a high 4. The font is readable and the spacing is well done; however the title is a little large for the page and the margins on the top\/bottom are uneven.
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\nPaper #6: This paper definitely deserves a 5. I would show this to my students as an example of what their paper should turn out like. It is pleasing to the eye is readable; the margins, font, spacing, and size are well done!","dateCreated":"1260117378","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17861499","body":"I agree with you guys about how important teaching about paper presentation is in the classroom. In my future classroom I also plan to explain presentation and the importance of it to my students, so that they are able to apply it to all of their papers.","dateCreated":"1260222061","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17862737","body":"Paper 1: I also agree the paper deserves a one because the scribbles and scratch out mistakes are really distracting and make it hard to read and concentrate on the paper and its main idea.
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\nPaper 2: This paper is extremely hard to read. This paper is literally unreadable because you have to take so much time to figure out what the author is even writing about.
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\nPaper 3: I agree with the score as well. the paper is pleasing to the eye but I agree with Megan that the handwriting wobbles a bit. It is a lot easier to read and the paper is well done.
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\nPaper 4: There is way to much space in between the paragraphs and it's distracting but otherwise the paper is good overall, so I agree with the score of 3
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\nPaper 5: The spacing is good as well as the font and it deserves the score of 4. The only thing that needs a little adjustment is the size of the title and the margin sizing.
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\nPaper 6: I agree that I would use a paper like this as an example in the classroom. The paper deserves a 5 for sure and it is an excellent example of a 5 paper. Like Dani said the margins, font, spacing, and size are all well done!!","dateCreated":"1260223171","smartDate":"Dec 7, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17693187","dateCreated":"1259854177","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17693187"},"dateDigested":1532390382,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Conventions","description":"Remembering Our Flag: I would give it a 3A because the writer does show much knowledge of conventions. They are handled well and can enhance the readability, but sometimes they are distracting. The writer attempts paragraphing, but sometimes is not that effective.
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\nAunt Leisa: I would give it a 1A because the errors in spelling, punctuation, capitalization, grammar and usage, and paragraphing distracts the reader. The spelling errors are frequent and the reader has to take the time to figure out what is trying to be said.
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\nWhat are the Qualities of a Good Teacher?: I would give it a 5E because the writer demonstrates a good grasp on conventions. The paper is very readable, with few errors. The paragraphing is very well done and reinforces the organizationa; structure.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17739305","body":"Remembering our flag: 5F
\nAunt Leisa: 1A
\nWhat are the qualities of a Good teacher: 5E","dateCreated":"1259901977","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"a_ruth_06","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/a_ruth_06","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17774907","body":"Remembering Flag 5a\/f spelling and punctuation is generally correct.
\nAunt Leisa 1a --lots of speeling errors, on common words also
\nWhat are the qualities of good teaachers---5e...good structure","dateCreated":"1259965682","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kkellyk03","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kkellyk03","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17792517","body":"Remembering our flag: aI would give it a 5F. spelling and punctuation are generally correct.
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\nAunt Leisa: I would give this paper a 1A. There are lots of spelling mistakes, punctuation errors, and grammatical errors. This made it extremely hard for me to read and makes the reader take the time to figure out what is being said, therefore making it hard to comprehend the paper itself.
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\nWhat are the qualities of a good teacher: I would give this a 5E. This paper had great structure and has very few errors. The paper is readable and organized, which makes it an easy read.","dateCreated":"1260038928","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17806457","body":"Remembering Our Flag: I would score this paper with a 5F.
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\nAunt Leisa: I would scpre this paper with a 1A. There are many spelling errors, punctuation errors, and grammatical errors. The paper is generally difficult to comprehend due to all of the errors--I had an extremely difficult time getting through the piece.
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\nWhat Are the Qualities of a Good Teacher?: I would score this paper with a 5E. It has a good structure with few errors and is well organized.","dateCreated":"1260115286","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17660311","dateCreated":"1259794076","smartDate":"Dec 2, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17660311"},"dateDigested":1532390383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Sentence Fluency","description":"Bud: I would give it a 1C because many of the sentences begin the same way ("Bud..."). This creates a monotonous pattern. The reader has to practice quite a bit to interpret the paper.
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\nRemembering Our Flag: I would give it a 5B because the writing flows from sentence to sentence. The sentences are varied in structure which allows for expression in oral reading. The length of each sentence varies also. The fragments used in this piece are very effective.
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\nAll About Rabbits: I would give it a 3A because the text is more mechanical than fliud. There is a lot of choppiness. The sentences may not seem artfully crafted or musical, but it is routine. The sentences are not really connected and more transitions woul dhelp this piece.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17739123","body":"Bud:1A\/1C
\nRemembering our flag: 5C
\nAll about Rabbits: 3A","dateCreated":"1259901593","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"a_ruth_06","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/a_ruth_06","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17777457","body":"Bud----1C alot of the sentences all beging the same
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\nRemembering our flag----5B the dialogue of the paper is pretty natural and flows sentence to sentence
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\nAll about rabbits----3A paper did not flow very well sound mechanical\/choppy","dateCreated":"1259969863","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kkellyk03","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kkellyk03","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17792399","body":"Bud: I would give this paper a 1C it is very monotone and doesn't grab the readers attention. Also the sentences all starting the same is very repetitive and not appealing to the reader.
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\nRemembering our flag: I would give it a 5B the paper flows and the sentences fit. The variation of sentence length and structure adds expression to the paper and allows the reader to read with fluency. Also I agree that the fragments used are effective as well.
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\nAll about the rabbits: I would give this paper a 3A. It didn't flow and caused it to sound choppy. It is defiently a more mechanically written paper and this makes it lifeless and not very interesting to read. The sentences don't connect well","dateCreated":"1260038599","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17806369","body":"Bud: I would score this paper with a 1C. Many of the sentences begin the same way making it extremely dull and monotone.
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\nRemembering Our Flag: I would score this paper with a 5B. the dialogue of the paper is natural and it flows sentence to sentence. The fragments used were effective and the sentence lengths vary.
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\nAll About Rabbits: I would score this paper with a 3A. The paper did not flow very well; however, it completed the paper. It sounded uneven; mechanical.","dateCreated":"1260114844","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17656319","dateCreated":"1259790437","smartDate":"Dec 2, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17656319"},"dateDigested":1532390383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Word Choice","description":"Mother is Nice: I would give it a 1A because the writer seems to have a limited vocabulary. She uses words such as nice and fun repeatedly. There is no specific meaning conveyed. They are nonspecific and distracting which limits the meaning.
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\nMy Most Rewarding Moment: I would give it a 3C because the language is functional, but there may be a little too much thesaurus being used. The writer attempts to use words that do not seem to fit. For example, with the dialogue shown, I do not think one of her friends would say "desirable songs" or "consolidated seats." The writer just attempts to use colorful language that takes away from the piece as a whole.
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\nA & W: I would give it a 5E because the words chosen were engaging and fit well with the flow of the piece. The choices made help to clarify the meaning of the writing. This sentence makes you feel like you are eating the food, "I could taste the salty, spicy, and tangy hot dog as it slipped down my throat."","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17738951","body":"Mother is Nice: 1A
\nMy most rewarding moment:1C
\nA&W:3A\/5F","dateCreated":"1259901113","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"a_ruth_06","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/a_ruth_06","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17774571","body":"Mother is Nice---1A- The writer has short sentences with little to no detail\/
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\nMy Most Rewarding Award---3c...the sentences do not all begin the same.. but like megan said, the writer uses words like colsoldiated propitious etc. This takes the reader away from what is being said because they are focused on figuringout what the word means.
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\nA&w---5E. the writing flows, you do not have to reread multiple times. topic is clear good deatils","dateCreated":"1259965292","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kkellyk03","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kkellyk03","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17792611","body":"Mother is nice: I would give this a 1A. The paper lacks details. I don't know what the main focus is after reading the paper and she repeats the same descriptive words.
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\nMy most rewarding reward: I would give this a 3C. I agree with megan that the thesaurus may have been used a little too much. Although descriptive words are great it is important to make sure they fit into the paper well, I feel as though the words are distracting and make the paper hard to comprehend.
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\nA&W: I would give this piece a
\n5E. The words made me want to read the story and I understood what they met. the paper flowed nicely and the details were clear. I agree that the descriptive words chosen made you feel as though you were in the story.","dateCreated":"1260039305","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17806273","body":"Mother is nice: I would scpre this paper with a 1A. The paper lacks detail and the main focus is unclear. The words used are repetative.
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\nMy most rewarding reward: I would score this paper with a 3C. Thesauras overload for sure! The words are too distracting making it diffcult to stay focused on the paper itself.
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\nA&W: I would score this paper with a 5E. The paper flows and the details were clear. The word choice enhanced the meaning and clarified the readers understanding of the piece.","dateCreated":"1260114522","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17654017","dateCreated":"1259788034","smartDate":"Dec 2, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17654017"},"dateDigested":1532390384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Voice","description":"A Day as a Rain Drop: I would give it a 3B because the writer buts him or herself in the piece. The writer seems sincere, which makes it pleasant. He or she says "Oh no, I'm evaporating. Up, up, up I'm going up!"
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\nOne Day I was Riding: I would give it a 1B because the writer seems indifferent and distant from the topic. The story should have some highs and lows, but it is written in a way that flattens it.
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\nFrogs: I would give it 5D because the writer speaks directly to the reader. I feel the writer crafts the piece with awareness of the audience. There is a strong commitment to the topic of frogs. He reveals a lot of knowledge. The writer also shows the reader why he needs to know about frongs and why he should care.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17738673","body":"A day as a rain drop:5E
\nOne day i was riding:1E
\nFrogs:5D","dateCreated":"1259900476","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"a_ruth_06","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/a_ruth_06","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17777881","body":"a day as a rain drop----3B the writing is safe
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\none day i was riding---1A\/1d the writer was not concerned with the reader,the writing is lifeless
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\nthe frogs---5D the writer is writing to the audience and does on informing them about the topic","dateCreated":"1259970452","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kkellyk03","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kkellyk03","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17792181","body":"A day as a rain drop: I would agree this piece is a 3B the writer is able to put himself into the paper and the writer is able to feel as though they are experiencing the a day out of a rain drop. This makes it fun and interesting to read. Also I found it interesting that it was in journal form, I feel this could be an attention getter when reading different pieces of work.
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\nOne Day I was Riding: I would give this paper a 1B. It is very dull and monotone. It doesn't interest me while I'm reading or make me want to see what happens although the story had the potential to be very interesting. It doesn't feel like the writer really got into the writing.
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\nthe frogs: I would give this piece a 5D. i agree that the writer definetly considers his audience and is well aware of his audience as well, as he wrote the paper. The paper makes the reader interested in frogs and want to read more about them.","dateCreated":"1260037728","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17806109","body":"A Day as a Rain Drop: I would score this paper with a 3B. I gave this score because the writer places him\/herself in the paper and communicates in a sincere and pleasant manner. My favorite part of the paper is when the writer says, "Oh no, I'm evaporating. Up, up, up I'm going up!" Very cute. I agree with Kelly, I enjoyed the journal format aswell.
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\nOne Day I was Riding: I would score this paper with a 1B. The writer seems flat; distant from the topic. The story should have some highs and lows, but it is written in a monotone way.
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\nFrogs: I would score this paper with 5D because the writer speaks directly to the reader. The writer also shows the reader why he needs to know about frogs and why he should care. The author writes with awareness of the audience. There is a strong commitment to the topic of frogs. He\/She reveals a lot of knowledge.","dateCreated":"1260113953","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17613553","dateCreated":"1259723432","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17613553"},"dateDigested":1532390384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Organization","description":"To Be a Good Teacher: I would give it a 1B because it lacks direction and ideas are strung together in a loose fashion. The connections between ideas are confusing and sometimes not even present.
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\nWhat are the qualities of a good teacher?: I would give it a 3A because it is organized enough to move the reader through the text without much confusion. There is an introduction that states what the paper will be about, as well as a conclusion.
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\nA good teacher: I would give this one a 5A because the organzation does enhance the central ideas. It compels the reader and moves him or her through the text. The introduction was very inviting and the conclusion leaves closure. The writer seems to have some passion towards the topic. I love the sentence, " It's what we're expected to tell you in our big colorful words for our big colorful grade.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"17738467","body":"to be a good teacher: 1B
\nWhat are the qualities of a good teacher: 3B
\nA Good Teacher: 5A","dateCreated":"1259899998","smartDate":"Dec 3, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"a_ruth_06","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/a_ruth_06","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17777643","body":"To be a good teacher---1b..conenctions are not presents...paper is very confusing
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\nWhat are the qualities of a good teacher----3A this paper has a intro and conclusion..they are not necessarily clear
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\nA good teacher---5A..inro is very appealing the the reader","dateCreated":"1259970150","smartDate":"Dec 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kkellyk03","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kkellyk03","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17792281","body":"To be a good teacher: I would give the paper a 1B. The paper is very confusing and hard to follow. I agree that the connections aren't strong and this makes the paper lack flow or direction. As I was reading I kept thinking where is this going?
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\nWhat are the qualities of a good teacher: I would give it a 3A. The paper has the structure, it includes an introduction and a conclusion but it is not very well developed.
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\nA good teacher: I would say a 5A. The paper is organized and the introduction makes the reader want to read the paper. The ideas in the paper connect and the paper flows well. Even throughout the paper I wanted to keep reading because of the way it was written.","dateCreated":"1260038088","smartDate":"Dec 5, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"KellyHar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KellyHar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"17805991","body":"To be a good teacher: I would score the paper with a 1B. The paper is very difficult to follow; however it is managable. The connections are not strong which makes the paper lack direction.
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\nWhat are the qualities of a good teacher: I would score this paper with a 3A. I agree that the paper has structure-- having an introduction and conclusion; however, it is not developed.
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\nA good teacher: I would score this paper with a 5A. The introduction is great and makes the reader want to continue reading. The paper is organized: the ideas connect and it flows well.","dateCreated":"1260113531","smartDate":"Dec 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"d.mckeown","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/d.mckeown","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"17611971","dateCreated":"1259721444","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17611971"},"dateDigested":1532390384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"OOPS!!!","description":"I was looking at the wrong rubric for the three I already posted, so you can disregard them...sorry! For the ideas I would give: Cat\/dog a 1F also. The paper doesn't seem to have a clear sense of purpose amd the reader has to make inferences about details. The text is very repetitious saying "they want to be good when they want to." Cat\/dog has really no discernable point.
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\nEarth a 3D because the writer begins to define the topic, but development is still needed. The writer does talk about his or her experiences and knowledge, but more specifics are needed.
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\nZeena a 5D because the paper is clear and focused on one topic. There are many details to enrich the central idea. The writer is definitely writing from his or her knowledge and experiences. They are original ideas.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"17610653","dateCreated":"1259720188","smartDate":"Dec 1, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"syring1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/syring1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/fall20096plus1traitsscoring.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/17610653"},"dateDigested":1532390385,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Zeena","description":"I would definitely give Zeena a 5A because it was well organized, where the structure and presentation was compelling and moved the reader through the text. The introduction drew me in and the conclusion ended the passage well.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}