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all about rabbits
I defenitely would rate this passage a 1 as well. The writer has no structure and there is a lot of grammatical and spellling errors which cause frustration to the readers. It was akward and frustrating to read. There was direction in the piece either.

remembering our flag
I would defnitely score this passage a 5. The writer sets up the readers for the story and grabs the attention of the reader right a way. The writer writed in such a way in which everything is fluid and every passage transitions into the next one, therefore making it easy to follow.

Bud
I nwould rate this passage a 1 as well. the sentences are choppy and do not flow. The writing should be more fluid and transition better, but it feel like the writer is almost giving a recap or even directions: "first they did...next they did..."

A&W
Haha! I was getting hungry while reading this passage. i would defnitely rate this passage a 5, because the variety of wrods used to describe the the things in the passage are excellent. the writer uses word choices appropriately and in wasy such that they capture the attention of the reader and they hold it throughout the whole story.

my mother is nice
I agree with everyone as well. I would defnitely score this piece a 1. The writer only uses the words: nice and fun to describe their mother and could have used a bigger variety of words for this piece. They are descibing their mother and all they can say is she is nice and fun. Does not grab the attention of the reader either.

one day i was riding
I honestly think it was too short. It did feel like they were just recappping what happened that day instead of writing to speal to their readers. I would rate this like a 2.5 or even a 2. The piece to me felt real disconnected from the readers. It almost felt like it was a preview and the writer should defnitely revise it and try to add more details and better word usage.

a day as a rain drop
This story was so cute. The way the writer wrote was like almost like they were truly trying to speak to their audience. It holds the reader's attention. The writer wrote with the intention of making the readers understand the day of a raindrop. Defnitely would score this piece a 5

To be a good teacher
I agree with everyone as well and I would rate this a one as well. I was surprised as well to find out that this was work produced out of a ninth grader. There is a lot of spelling and grammatical errors and they are causing stress to the readers, therefore causing the readers to not follow the story. There is no intorduction or conclusion which state and restate the writer's intent of purpose.

A good teacher
Excellent and well written! The passage is extremely organized and the writer's main idea is known right from the beginning. The paddage never looses the readers and holds the readers attention throughout the whole reading. There are no mistakes. I would defnitely give a 5.